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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates
an
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the
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 esteem of people
that
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who
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 are not able to read and write broken down by gender and region
the
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in the
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last
 year.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 females have the
higher
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highest
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 percentage in all
countries
 studied,
instead
 males had received more education. Most of
women
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the women
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 that
are
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come from South Asia,
Arab
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the Arab
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 States and Sub-Saharan Africa are not able to read and write and they have
a really high percentages
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a really high percentage
really high percentages
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 in
this
 study (almost 60%, just over 50% and less
then
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than
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 50% respectively). Oceania
ladies
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lady's
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 bar,
instead
, is much less than
other
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the
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 aforementioned, but
the
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apply
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double
of
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that of
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Latin
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a Latin
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 American bar. Most of
females
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the females
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 that can write and read are living in developed
countries
.
On the contrary
, illiterate males have lower percentages than females in all
countries
. In East
Asia
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Asia,
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 men are less
then
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than
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 half and
two third
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two-thirds
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 in South Asia same in Arab States. The only two places where men and women are practically at the same level are in developed
countries
 and Latin America.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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