Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
While
many people
agree that the parents sending their sons or daughters to learning
in schools should not pay Wrong verb form
learn
on
Change preposition
apply
taxes
for supporting the educational system of regions, many argues
that it is impartial Change the verb form
argue
denying
their Wrong verb form
to deny
taxes
. In my view, I totally agree with the former view and the reasons why I agree with that statement will be discussed in this
essay.
On the one hand, taxes
should be paid by everyone, not only who
living in the cities, but Correct pronoun usage
those
also
consuming the products. To illustrates
, whole Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrate
people
paid taxes
directly from consumption or services daily. Moreover
, I personally think that getting along as a couple is capable of making more money as they can combine their incomes, comparing
to Wrong verb form
compared
who
do Correct pronoun usage
those who
no
have a lover.
Correct your spelling
not
On the other hand
, parents have various responsibilities to take charge in order to
their Change preposition
for
children
and family have
a well-being. Fix the infinitive
to have
For example
, people
having children
have to pay out their money more than a single human such
as expense
of studying in elementary courses and learning additional subjects, which is Add an article
the expense
children
interested like
music or arts. Change preposition
in like
Additionally
, presently almost
learning subjects Correct your spelling
most
is
higher than Correct subject-verb agreement
are
the
past including committing ways and routine products’ prices that their Change preposition
in the
children
used and consumed. Presently, many people
stuck
Add a missing verb
are stuck
at
money problems since stuff and services have Change preposition
with
a serious price issues
for paying.
Correct the article-noun agreement
serious price issues
a serious price issue
Conclusion
, even being a couple can take more Change preposition
In conclusion
incomes
than Fix the agreement mistake
income
an
usual Correct article usage
apply
people
. Families should be supported by government
to reduce Add an article
the government
expense
and Fix the agreement mistake
expenses
canceled
paying Wrong verb form
cancel
taxes
because economical
circumstance has a dramatic rise of cost products and travelling costs nowadays.Replace the word
economic
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task response
The essay addresses the prompt; however, it needs to elaborate more on the main arguments. Try to specify how paying taxes affects parents who send their children to private schools and clarify why they should be exempt.
coherence and cohesion
The arguments need to be clearer and more logically structured. Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that supporting points directly relate to the main argument.
task response
Concrete, relevant examples are lacking. Incorporate specific examples or case studies to support your points and enhance your arguments.
task response
The essay has a clear position on the topic and sticks to the main argument throughout.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction effectively presents the issue and the writer's opinion on it.
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