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The table below shows the result of a survey asked 6800 Scottish (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the result of a survey asked 6800 Scottish (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the
rate
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 of cultural
activities
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 that 6800
people
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 over 16 years old in Scotland have participated in for the past 12 months.
Overall
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, any
performance
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 including dancing, singing, playing music tools and acting was the most popular
while
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 computer-based
activities
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 were the least. The largest
people
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 of
people
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 from 16 to 24 had experienced any
performance
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, visual arts, writing and computer
activities
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whereas
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 crafts and cultural purchases were favoured most by those between 45 and 74. Starting with the popular
activities
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, any
performance
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 shared the largest with 22% for all aged 16 and over, of which the youngest group from 16 to 24 accounted for the largest with 35%, followed by the groups of 25 to 44 and 45 and 74. Visual arts followed a similar pattern of
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although
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 the percentages of all age groups were slightly lower. Crafts and cultural purchases were
also
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 one of the
favorite
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activities
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 that Scottish all aged 16 and over enjoyed with 19% and 16% respectively.
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 the
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 of the former was a little higher than that of the latter for 45 to 74
people
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, both age groups of 16 to 24 and 25 to 44 shared the same
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 11% and 17% respectively. Turning to the rest of the cultural
activities
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, the proportions of writing and computer-based
activities
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 for all aged over 16 were below 10%.
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, the percentage of those between 24 and 44 tended to prefer computer-based
activities
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 more to writing
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 9% and 6% respectively
while
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 the same
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 of
people
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 from 45 to 74 participated in them with 5%. Regarding the percentage of those between 16 and 24, writing is more popular than computers with 17% and 10%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, activities, people, performance with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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