The chart below shows the average cost of monthly contract for four diﬀerent mobile (cell phones) in a European country from January to September 2002, measured in euro.

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The line graph illustrates, the price of various mobile contracts including(

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, Lex, Sim TX, and Alpha) in European nations from January to September 2002. The units were measured in

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Overall

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, there was a rise in each contract except six tx, which showed a decreasing

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However

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, Alpha showed an upward

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and its popularity increased suddenly

at the end

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Whereas

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Domo

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showed a steady decrease at the final stage.

To begin

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with, Alpha at the initial stage began with the lowest cost which was about 5

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this

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amount remained unchanged up to February

after

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this

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the amount showed a slight increase.

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this

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trend

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plummeted in

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and reached the value of 5

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again but after

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the graph showed a sudden rise and the value touched a price of more than 10

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but it increased more in September to about 25

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In addition

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, lex and

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also

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showed a rise but in the end, the rate of

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decreased slightly.

In contrast

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, sim tx showed a little variation from April to

June

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while

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showing an upward

trend

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whereas

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from

June

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it suddenly fell from 13

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to 10

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. And onwards reached to the lowest value in September about up to 8

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Vocabulary: Replace the words domo, euros, trend, june with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 7 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

209 words

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The chart below shows the average cost of monthly contract for four diﬀerent mobile (cell phones) in a European country from January to September 2002, measured in euro.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People learn things better from those at their own level—such as fellow students or co-workers—than from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that time spent on television, video and computer games can be valuable for children. Others beleve this may have negative effects on a child's development. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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