The diagram below shows two different processes for manufacturing black tea. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram shows the two processes for manufacturing black
tea
. The traditional way is used for making loose Use synonyms
tea
and Use synonyms
modern
process is ideal for teabags.
When collecting Add an article
the modern
tea
, the Use synonyms
tea
picker picks only the two top leaves and the bud Use synonyms
of
ensure a Change preposition
to
high quality
Add a hyphen
high-quality
tea
. Use synonyms
Then
, the Linking Words
tea
leaves go through withering, where leaves are spread out and Use synonyms
air
is passed through withering, where leaves are spread out and Add an article
the air
air
is passed through them to remove up to 60 per cent of their moisture.
After that, the leaves are ready for rolling or cutting. Factories use traditional methods of rolling and crushing or faster modern methods of cutting, tearing and curling to make Add an article
the air
teabags
. In both processes, natural enzymes are produced from the leaves. Correct your spelling
tea bags
The next step is
oxidation, where the enzymes from the leaves mix with the air. Linking Words
This
changes the colour of the leaves from green to copper and creates a nice flavour and aroma. Linking Words
Finally
, the leaves are fired and dried. By Linking Words
this
stage, little moisture remains in the Linking Words
tea
-just three per centUse synonyms
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