The diagram below shows two different processes for manufacturing black tea. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows two different processes for manufacturing black tea.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram shows the two processes for manufacturing black
tea
. The traditional way is used for making loose
tea
and
modern
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the modern
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process is ideal for teabags. When collecting
tea
, the
tea
picker picks only the two top leaves and the bud
of
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ensure a
high quality
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high-quality
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tea
.
Then
, the
tea
leaves go through withering, where leaves are spread out and
air
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the air
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is passed through withering, where leaves are spread out and
air
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the air
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is passed through them to remove up to 60 per cent of their moisture. After that, the leaves are ready for rolling or cutting. Factories use traditional methods of rolling and crushing or faster modern methods of cutting, tearing and curling to make
teabags
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tea bags
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. In both processes, natural enzymes are produced from the leaves.
The next step is
oxidation, where the enzymes from the leaves mix with the air.
This
changes the colour of the leaves from green to copper and creates a nice flavour and aroma.
Finally
, the leaves are fired and dried. By
this
stage, little moisture remains in the
tea
-just three per cent
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • plucking
  • withering
  • rolling
  • fermentation
  • drying
  • grading
  • packaging
  • oxidation
  • quality
  • efficiency
  • cost-effectiveness
  • scalability
  • aroma
  • flavor profile
  • sequence of steps
  • equipment
  • methodology
  • production rate
  • comparative analysis
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