The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the modifications that have taken place in Grange Park between 1920 and the present day.
Overall
, Linking Words
it is clear that
everything has changed except two entrances to Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street and the top-left rose Linking Words
garden
.
Use synonyms
To begin
with, the middle fountain was replaced by a square rose Linking Words
garden
surrounded by a new seat on each side. On the left-hand side of the map, a new gigantic amphitheatre for concerts was built Use synonyms
instead
of an old stage for musicians, Linking Words
besides
the bottom Linking Words
garden
of roses and four benches were moved out.
Use synonyms
Additionally
, looking on the right-hand side of the park, an old Linking Words
garden
and a pond were obliterated and two new facilities sprung up comprising a cafe and a Use synonyms
children
playground. A long glasshouse turned into a beautiful and enormous water feature. Change noun form
children's
Lastly
, seats were disappeared and a new entrance for underground parking lots set in.Linking Words
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words garden with synonyms.
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