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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart below illustrates the estimation of males and females who were illiterate in six regions of the world
last
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 year.
Overall
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, there are more
women
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 who cannot read and write compared to
men
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 across the six regions presented. The region which had the most illiterate people
last
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 year was South Asia with around 55% of
women
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 and more than one-third of
men
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.
In addition
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, more
women
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 in Arab States could not read and write compared to
women
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 in Sub-Saharan Africa,
whereas
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 there were more
men
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 in Sub-Saharan Africa who were illiterate compared to
men
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 in Arab States. The region that had the least illiterate people was Developed Countries with almost zero illiterate
men
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 and
women
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.
Furthermore
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, Latin America and East Asia
also
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 had a minimum number of illiterate people but the total percentage of illiterate
women
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 and
men
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 in East Asia was slightly higher than the total percentage of illiterate
women
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 and
men
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 in Latin America, which were 28% and 21% respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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