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There have been several complaints about the reception area where visitors to your company arrive. Your mannager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter - describe the complaints that have been made - say why the reception area is important - suggest how the reception area could be improved

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Dear Alex, I am writing
this
 to share critical suggestions regarding
improvement
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the improvement
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 of our office's
reception
area
. We have received myriad complaints from various
peoples
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people
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 including our clients and
vistors
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visitors
, regarding
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the deterioting
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deterioting
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deteriorating
 condition of our company's
reception
. All complaints have
pin-pointed
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few
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a few
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 common concerns
such
 as incompetent staff , poor lighting and inconsistent cooling in
waiting
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area
. We all know
importance
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the importance
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 good
reception
area
 because it gives
company's
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 first impression for visitors and we must focus on making it
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. By
imporving
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improving
 visitor's
area
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areas
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, we can make our
cutomers
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customers
 experience valuable. We should arrange
advance
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 interpersonal skills for our staff, so they can make
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the vistors
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vistors
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vistors'
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 experience more engaging.
Also
, we can hire some experts to recreate our
reception
 or
visting
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visit
area
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the area
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 and fix problems related to cooling and lighting. Yours sincerely Sandeep
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single main idea to enhance clarity and coherence.
advices
Consider proofreading the letter to correct minor spelling and grammatical errors, for example, 'myriad complaints', 'deteriorating condition', and 'astonishing'.
greeting and closing
The letter has a clear and polite closing, which is important in maintaining a professional tone.
complete response
The response addresses all the bullet points mentioned in the task, which demonstrates a complete achievement of the task response.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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