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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates how English people out of work spent their
time
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last
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 year and the study is broken down by gender and by morning and afternoon
time
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.
Overall
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, it is clear to see that most people use morning
time
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 to do
activities
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. Females spent most of their
time
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 doing housework, shopping and job-hunting
activities
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 during the morning
time
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 (19%, 20% and 22% respectively).
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, males used their morning on the same
activities
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 but within different percentages,
for example
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, men did housework activity was more than double of females, which means 49%,
while
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 they did shopping just a little bit more than females (26%), but less on job hunting (16%). In the afternoon
time
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, as we can see both genders are quieter, and the percentages are decisively lower.
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, if we have a look at staying in bed and playing sports
activities
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 it is easy to see that males had no interest in d

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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, activities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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