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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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The pie charts illustrate the percentage of learners from Britain who speak another
language
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besides
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 English in the year
of
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2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the most spoken
language
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 in both periods is Spanish.
Additionally
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, the most beneficial change is the decrease in students who couldn't speak any other
language
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 from 20% to 10%.
Firstly
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, 10 years later, the percentage of bilingual and German speakers did not change and remained at 10%.
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, another
language
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 segment has experienced an increase of 5%. The French
language
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 was 5% less popular in 2010 than in 2000.
Secondly
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,
it is clear that
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 only 10% of students did not learn a new
language
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,
while
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 at the starting point of 20%.
Furthermore
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, the biggest number in the charts
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 speaking in Spanish was more interesting than others among students,
also
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 it climbed from 5% to 35% in 2010.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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