Your child's teacher has requested a meeting with you this Friday to discuss your child's low test scores. Unfortunately, you cannot attend. Write a letter to your child's teacher. In your letter Describe why you cannot attend the meeting Explain how you have been helping your child study Propose another time to meet Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Mr. Smith,

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Dear Mr Smith, I am writing
this
letter in response to your request
of meeting
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you
for discussing
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my son
Jason
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low score in
recently
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concluded
physics
test. Unfortunately, I am preoccupied on Thursday 6th June 2024 as I have to attend
conference
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in London on the same day. I am helping Jason to focus on
physics
concepts and motivating him to focus more on studying
physics
in
spare
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time. he is showing improvement in
physics
learning. I am sure in
next
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test he will clear the test with good grades. I can meet you in person on 10th June 2024 Monday.
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I will be free on that day and visit you in person on that day during school time from 9am to 2. 30pm.please let me know
convenient
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timing
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for
meeting
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the meeting
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. It will be nice to discuss
Jason
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academic performance with you. I look forward to your response. Yours sincerely, Mark Taylor
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Task Achievement
The letter appropriately addresses the main points but could benefit from further elaboration on how you have been helping Jason study. Including specific methods or resources would strengthen the response.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure consistency in tense and subject-verb agreement. For example, 'he is showing' should be 'He is showing.' Reviewing for these minor errors will improve coherence and readability.
Task Achievement
The letter has a clear and respectful tone, suitable for a formal communication with a teacher.
Coherence and Cohesion
The structure of the letter is logical, with a beginning that states the purpose, a middle that explains the situation, and an end that proposes a solution.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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