Every year several languages die out. This is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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people
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can be naturally wiped out. On the one hand, I am concerned about the Use synonyms
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poeple
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task achievement
Your essay could be improved by providing more concrete examples. While you offer some relevant points, they remain somewhat general. Specific examples and evidence would strengthen your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Ensure the consistency in the use of tenses and subject-verb agreement. For example, 'graduate were used less and disappear' should be corrected to 'gradually become less used and disappear.' Also, 'the died out of' should be changed to 'the dying out of.'
coherence cohesion
Try to avoid repetition, such as repeating the phrase 'disappeared languages.' Also, make sure each paragraph smoothly transitions to the next one. Work on making your ideas flow more coherently from one to another.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in providing a structured response. Your stance is clear, and you offer both sides of the argument.
task achievement
The essay addresses the task adequately by exploring both advantages and disadvantages of fewer languages in the world. You provide a balanced view, which is commendable.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.
Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.
Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example