People in many countries are spending less time with their families. What are the reasons, and effects of this?
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have much time
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time
so it comes with pressure and stress that they have to face and another's impact reason is technology today are more develop communication with family by mobile is easy and save time
more than meet them face to face. Moreover
, large nations think that money is the biggest essential in their life than family. Some people just talk with their birth by telephone on important days.
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the family
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Furthermore
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time
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of them
also
older nations.
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today's
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