Some people enjoy change and they look forward to new experiences. Other like their lives to stay the same and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life and explain your perferance.
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individuals
changing
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people
always want to discover new things. New skills help us to make our life more colerful
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motivate
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For instance
, every summer I go to dancing school. It is new
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a new
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people
in dance school and we always keep in touch and inform each other about new courses.
On the other hand
, some people
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some,
place
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colleguas
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colleagues
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from one
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his job often changes his place
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Grammar
Improve grammatical accuracy by reviewing subject-verb agreement and sentence structure. For instance, "some individuals" instead of "some infividuals".
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Enhance coherence by using more transitional phrases and connectors to link ideas more clearly.
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Task Achievement
You have made a clear attempt to compare both perspectives and state your preference.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has an introduction and a conclusion, which offers a sense of completeness.
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Use of personal experiences adds a genuine touch to your writing.
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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