Some people enjoy change and they look forward to new experiences. Other like their lives to stay the same and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life and explain your perferance.

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Some

people

try to often change their work and living

place

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other

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others

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consider it is risk alter frequently. Personally, I agree with

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statement. In

this

essay

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essay,

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I will explain my viewpoint. On the one hand, some

infividuals

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individuals

consider that

changing

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is more important for human mental health. Because

people

always want to discover new things. New skills help us to make our life more

colerful

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colourful

and it

motivate

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us to discover new abilities.

For instance

, every summer I go to dancing school. It is

new

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a new

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experience for me and despite the fact that I can not dance well I find it

joyfull

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joyful

joyfully

. I meet, many interesting

people

in dance school and we always keep in touch and inform each other about new courses.

On the other hand

, some

people

believe that changing is risky for individuals, because they

prefere

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prefer

to live

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stabile

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stable

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life and

stationary

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work. For

some

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it is difficult to change work

place

and living area. They can not get

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apply

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well with new

colleguas

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colleagues

and neighbours.

Moreover

, some find it

borring

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boring

to migrate

one

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place

to another.

For example

, a friend of mine

due to

his job often changes his

place

and she

find

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borring

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boring

To sum up

, some found

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changing and consider it is new experience for them.

By contrast

other

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others

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think it is

tiering

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tiring

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to change always from

place

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Coherence and Cohesion

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2Word repetition
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4 paragraphs

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Some people enjoy change and they look forward to new experiences. Other like their lives to stay the same and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life and explain your perferance.

Fully explain your ideas

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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree?

An increasing number of people are choosing to have cosmetic surgery in order to improve their appearance. Why are more people choosing to have operation to change the way they look? Do you think this a positive or negative development?

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