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The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.
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The line graph depicts the ban a prices in the different
region
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 between 1994 and 2004.It is clear from the graph that the
banana
price
dominanted
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dominated
 In Japan compared to other nations
while
 the equivalent of
banana
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the banana
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price
 in
usa
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USA
 ranked the lowest over the period shown.
To begin
 with, In
Japan
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Japan,
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 the
banana
 Brice peaked at 3 dollars approximately in 1995 in the following year
then
 sharply declined to less than 2 dollars in 1997 .Afterwards ,there was a
fuuctuating
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fluctuating
 rate from 199 to 2004,
On the other hand
 ,in France the bane
price
remains
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 constant from 1994 to 1997 .
However
, in spite of wave rates the
banana
price
had
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decreased
since
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2000to
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2000 to
 2003
then
 eventually grew in 2004. In the USA there was a reduction in
banana
price
 was less than 1 dollar in 1994 which jumped to above 1 dollar in 1995
afterthat
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After
 the ban
a
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price
 experienced
slightly
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 dawn trend and
remains
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remained
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the
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stable at 1
dollars
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dollar
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 in 5 decades.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words banana, price with synonyms.
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