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The graph shows the average carbon emissions per person in four countries between 1967 and 2007

The graph shows the average carbon emissions per person in four countries between 1967 and 2007
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The line chart
dispaly
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display
displays
amount
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the amount
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 of
carboon
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carbon
 dioxide
emissions
 in four different countries from 1967 to 2007.
Overall
, Italy and Portugal have shown an increase in the numbers,
while
 the United
kingdom
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Kingdom
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 and Sweden have
witness
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witnessed
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 a decrease
at the end
 of the period. In 1976, the amount of carbon dioxide released in the United
Kingdon
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Kingdom
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 was around 9
tonnes
 per
person
, the numbers increased
throughhout
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throughout
 the years to
approximelty
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approximately
 7
tonnes
 per
person
 in 2007. Sweden,
on the other hand
,
has
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had
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 about 7
tonnes
 of
emissions
 in 1967, but in 1977 there was an
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increase
incease
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increase
 to reach above 10
tonnes
 per
person
, following a dramatic decrease to reach the bottom of around 5
tonnes
 per
person
 in 2007. Around 4
tonnes
 the carbon dioxide
emissions
 were in Italy in 1967, which started to climb to almost 8
tonnes
 in 1997 and remained stable to the end of the period. Portugal
has
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had
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 the lowest
emissions
 rate in 1967 around 1.5
tonnes
, during the period the numbers were increased to reach the top of 5
tonnes
 in 2007.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, tonnes, person with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • per capita
  • environmental impact
  • trend analysis
  • industrialization
  • energy consumption
  • greenhouse gases
  • sustainable development
  • emission reduction
  • technological innovation
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • economic growth
  • climate change
  • environmental policy
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