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The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the
number
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 of incoming foreign
tourists
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 in five different countries from 1995 to 2010.
Overall
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, in the period shown, The US preserved its domination in terms of receiving international people.
However
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,
France
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 showed a more dramatic increase over 15 years.
Furthermore
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, other countries experienced a gradual increase in the
number
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 of foreign tourist arrivals, but much lower than The US and
France
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. In 1995, 70
million
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visitors
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 from other countries decided to visit The US, which was more than two times greater than that of
France
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. In the same year, Malaysia hosted 20
million
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 international
tourists
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, as compared to
France
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 with 30
million
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visitors
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.
Moreover
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, in 1995, an equal
number
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 of
visitors
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 explored Brazil and Egypt, 10
million
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 people. Over
this
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 period, the
number
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 of foreign
tourists
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 in The US rose to a peak of 90
million
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 people and
then
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 a slow drop to less than 90
million
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 in the
last
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 year. After increasing steadily to 60
million
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 in 2000, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 rose modestly to 70
million
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 in 2005 and again showed a more significant increase to approximately 90
million
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 foreign
visitors
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 in 2010. Meanwhile, the
number
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 of incoming
tourists
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 to Malaysia went up slightly to just over 40
million
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 in 2010,
while
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 the
number
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 of
tourists
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 was about 10
million
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 in the
last
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 decade.
In addition
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, the tourist gap between Egypt and Brazil was increasingly wider and Egypt hosted about 20
million
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 foreign
visitors
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 in 2010,
while
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 15
million
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tourists
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 went to Brazil in the same year.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, tourists, france, million, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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