The given graph shows four different kinds of goods trasported in The UK between 1974 and 2002. In general rail hadn’t much changed but the others had grown in 38 years.

The given graph shows  four different kinds of goods trasported in The UK between 1974 and 2002. In general rail hadn’t much changed  but the others had grown in 38 years.
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The given graph shows four different kinds of goods
trasported
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transported
in The UK between 1974 and 2002. In
general
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rail hadn’t much changed but the others had grown in 38 years.
Road
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The road
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had been
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almost 70
million
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tonnes
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when started in 1974.
Then
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it
had
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inreased
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increased
slightly but
had
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decreased to where it started in 1982. After that road
had
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contiuned
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continued
climb
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to climb
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slowly to 1990. It
had
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stayed
same
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the same
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level in 1994.
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Finally
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it rose
gradualy
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gradually
to just under 100
million
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tonnes
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until 2002 and it was the first
one
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in 2002. Water hadn’t much changed first two years and stayed around 40
million
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tonnes
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. After
that
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that,
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it
had
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increased dramatically
almost
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20
million
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tonnes
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in 1982.
Then
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it
had
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continued
stabil
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stable
until 1994. In 1998 , it
had fallen
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fell
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steadly
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steadily
but it decreased rapidly to just over 60
million
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tonnes
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and it finished as the second
one
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. Rail hadn’t changed
at
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in
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first
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the first
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two years.
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, it
had fallen
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fell
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slightly around 30
million
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tonnes
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. Rail had grown a little bit but it had returned to almost 30
million
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tonnes
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in 1994.
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, it grew to 40
million
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tonnes
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and it was third in 2002.
Pipeline
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The pipeline
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had
strated
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started
as the
last
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one
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and it had climbed dramatically to more
20
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than 20
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million
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tonnes
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. After that, it had stayed
stabil
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stable
until 1990.
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it
had fallen
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fell
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to 20
million
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tonnes
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and it didn’t
changed
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change
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again
to
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until
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2002. It finished as the
last
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one
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally, last".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words million, tonnes, one with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changed" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "climb" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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