The given graph shows four different kinds of goods trasported in The UK between 1974 and 2002. In general rail hadn’t much changed but the others had grown in 38 years.
The given graph shows four different kinds of goods
trasported
in The UK between 1974 and 2002. In Correct your spelling
transported
general
rail hadn’t much changed but the others had grown in 38 years.
Add a comma
general,
Road
Add an article
The road
had been
almost 70 Wrong verb form
was
million
tonnes
when started in 1974. Then
it had
Unnecessary verb
apply
inreased
slightly but Correct your spelling
increased
had
decreased to where it started in 1982. After that road Unnecessary verb
apply
had
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apply
contiuned
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continued
climb
slowly to 1990. It Fix the infinitive
to climb
had
stayed Unnecessary verb
apply
same
level in 1994. Change the article
the same
Finally
it rose Add a comma
Finally,
gradualy
to just under 100 Correct your spelling
gradually
million
tonnes
until 2002 and it was the first one
in 2002. Water hadn’t much changed first two years and stayed around 40 million
tonnes
. After that
it Add a comma
that,
had
increased dramatically Unnecessary verb
apply
almost
20 Change preposition
to almost
million
tonnes
in 1982. Then
it had
continued Unnecessary verb
apply
stabil
until 1994. In 1998 , it Correct your spelling
stable
had fallen
Wrong verb form
fell
steadly
but it decreased rapidly to just over 60 Correct your spelling
steadily
million
tonnes
and it finished as the second one
.
Rail hadn’t changed at
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in
first
two years. Correct article usage
the first
Then
, it had fallen
slightly around 30 Wrong verb form
fell
million
tonnes
. Rail had grown a little bit but it had returned to almost 30 million
tonnes
in 1994. Finally
, it grew to 40 million
tonnes
and it was third in 2002. Pipeline
had Add an article
The pipeline
strated
as the Correct your spelling
started
last
one
and it had climbed dramatically to more 20
Change preposition
than 20
million
tonnes
. After that, it had stayed stabil
until 1990. Correct your spelling
stable
Then
it had fallen
to 20 Wrong verb form
fell
million
tonnes
and it didn’t changed
again Change the verb form
change
to
2002. It finished as the Change preposition
until
last
one
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