“The graph compares the percentage of international students and the percentage of UK learners gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK university.”

“The graph compares the percentage of international students and the percentage of UK learners gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK university.”
The bar chart illustrates the ratio of overseas and British
students
who scored second-class degrees or above at a major
UK
university in 2009.
Overall
, the highest
number
of overseas
students
were in Informational technology,
while
for the
UK
students
were in Sociology. The lowest
number
was in International law for international learners and Information technology for
UK
students
. Around 80% of international
students
scored the highest average in Information Technology,
while
the second highest was for Electrical Engineering at 80%, and about 70% of English Literature, Art History, and Sociology
students
scored the second class or better.
However
, the International law learners had the lowest rate of almost 50%. The highest
number
of
UK
students
who got a second-class degree or above were in Sociology and Art history with 80%.
While
students
in International law, English Literature, and Nursing were all just above or below 70%. It is worth mentioning that
UK
and International
students
in Accountancy were at the same
number
of 60%.
Furthermore
, Nursing
students
from both the
UK
and overseas were at the same rate just under 80%.
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