The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The Illustration depicts how
sugar
canes
are manufactured into the final product.
The process is compound
of seven stages in Correct your spelling
composed
creation
of Add an article
the creation
carbohydrate
.
The 7-step cycle begins with cultivating Fix the agreement mistake
carbohydrates
sugar
canes
and ends with letting already produced sugar
dry and cool. This
is achieved by turning canes
into liquid material that is
turned into sugar
later.
The process starts with letting sugar
canes
grow for 12-18 months, which are then
harvested either by specialized machine or sorted by workers hand. They are then
sent to be crushed and turned into juice. The substance then
goes through a limestone filter to be purified.
At
step 5, clean juice is put in an evaporator Change preposition
In
that is
heated and ready to transform the liquid into syrup. Afterwards, from the syrup crystals of sugar
are extracted and deposited in the open container to allow them to dry and cool. Following
this
, the process of producing sugar
is completed and it commences again.Submitted by katenok200312 on
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