The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The Illustration depicts how
sugar
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canes
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are manufactured into the final product. The process is
compound
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composed
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of seven stages in
creation
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the creation
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of
carbohydrate
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. The 7-step cycle begins with cultivating
sugar
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canes
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and ends with letting already produced
sugar
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dry and cool.
This
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is achieved by turning
canes
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into liquid material
that is
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turned into
sugar
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later. The process starts with letting
sugar
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canes
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grow for 12-18 months, which are
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harvested either by specialized machine or sorted by workers hand. They are
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sent to be crushed and turned into juice. The substance
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goes through a limestone filter to be purified.
At
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step 5, clean juice is put in an evaporator
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heated and ready to transform the liquid into syrup. Afterwards, from the syrup crystals of
sugar
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are extracted and deposited in the open container to allow them to dry and cool.
Following
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this
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, the process of producing
sugar
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is completed and it commences again.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, canes with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • sugar cane
  • harvesting
  • transporting
  • factory
  • crushing
  • extracting
  • juice
  • filtering
  • impurities
  • heating
  • evaporating
  • syrup
  • boiling
  • crystallizing
  • sugar
  • separating
  • drying
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • stage
  • process
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