Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

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In recent times, people have shared different views on
major
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the major
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enironmental
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environmental
problems
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we face. Special types of herbs and
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animals
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animal
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extintion
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extinction
as
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has
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been considered the main loss,
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there are
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crucial challenges to our environment. I strongly accept that
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the loss of certain
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types
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of plants and
animals
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has an upper hand. Particular types of seeds and wildlife have become a source of medicine and food. By
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losing
such
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type
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types
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of things,
shortage
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a shortage
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of form of pain
releaves
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relievers
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methods will be created
as well as
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overload
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an overload
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of
expactations
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expectations
on
phamacuticals
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pharmaceuticals
. Some creatures are treated as food,
extintion
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extinction
of
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things will lead to hunger in the
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community
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,
jakaranda
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jacaranda
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tree leaves are so important as they are used as
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of eye
cleaining
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cleaning
substance.
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, we get
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meet
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meat
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from other
animals
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. In my
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opinion
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I
belive
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believe
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that
lossing
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losing
plants and
animals
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is a major
environment
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problem. There are
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more strong
problems
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to
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our
evnironment
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environment
such
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as global warming. The gases
emmited
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emitted
from plains
causes
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problems
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like global warming which is very harmful to the
sorroundings
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surroundings
.
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can be controlled by the
gorvenment
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government
by
impling
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imposing
taxes
of
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the flying companies to reduce
problems
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like
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one.
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, the carbon from
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smoke
distrubs
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disturbs
disrupt
the
partterns
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patterns
pattern
of rainfall leading to
draught
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drought
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.
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However
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this
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cant
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can't
be seen as a major problem as
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the government
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can put measures to reduce
this
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.
It is clear that
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we need food and herbs from plants and
animals
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while
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problems
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like global warming can be avoided. I strongly support that plant loss is the main problem.
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grammar
Work on improving grammatical accuracy and spelling. For example, correctly spell terms like 'pharmaceuticals,' 'extinction,' and 'environment.'
development
Develop your ideas more fully in the body paragraphs to ensure a more comprehensive response. For instance, elaborate on how the loss of species impacts ecosystems and human life.
examples
Provide more specific examples to strengthen your points. Instead of general statements, include detailed examples that clearly illustrate your arguments.
task achievement
You have attempted to address both sides of the argument, which is good for achieving a balanced discussion.
coherence cohesion
The structure of your essay is clear with a recognizable introduction, body, and conclusion.
examples
You have provided some relevant examples, like the use of jacaranda leaves, which adds value to your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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