The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given graph illustrates data about the arrivals of international tourists in five countries.

Overall

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it is clear that

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the top-ranked country which had more tourists than others is the USA, meanwhile, the lowest result was demonstrated by Brazil.

Firstly

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, in 1995, the United States had approximately 70

million

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, in the meantime,

France

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had only 31

million

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, these two areas were at the top,

while

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Brazil and Egypt were at the lowest

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because they had equal results of 10

million

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However

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, Malaysia was in third place with 20

million

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, in 2000,

France

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had a dramatic rise to 60

million

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whereas

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, the USA increased slightly to 85

million

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. It is obvious that Egypt overtook Brazil with 11

million

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, Malaysia had a noticeable growth to 22

million

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. In 2010, Malaysia and Egypt went up significantly to 40

million

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, in the meantime, the USA went down dramatically to 82

million

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, which means that America and

France

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had the same results, as

France

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had a substantial improvement.

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