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The table and charts below gve information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money come from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below gve information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money come from and the charts show how it was distributed.
the table and the charts provide information concerning the source of the UK's
police
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 budget
as well as
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 the allocation in 2017 compared to 2018 generally speaking, the
police
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 budget in Britain increased from 304.7
million
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pounds
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 in 2017 to 318
million
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pounds
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 in 2018. as presented in the table, the sources of cops budget in the UK were from
national
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the national
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 government in major, around 175,5
million
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pounds
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 and 177,8
million
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pounds
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 in 2017 and 2018, respectively. Local taxes
also
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 give a big portion to the
police
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's financial source, it is 91.2
million
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pounds
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 in 2017 and growing up to 102.3
million
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pounds
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 in 2018. the
police
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also
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 got economic input from other resources
such
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 as grants but in small numbers, 38
million
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pounds
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 in the first year and slightly lifted up to 38.5
million
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pounds
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 in the next year.
on the other hand
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, the UK's cops spent the allocation mostly on the officer's and staff's salaries even though it decreased, from approximately 75 per
cent
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 at the beginning of the period to 69 per
cent
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at the end
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 of the period. unlike the wages cost, the purchases by the Britain
Police
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 in technology jumped up from 8 per
cent
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 in 2017 to 14 per
cent
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 in 2028
while
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 the spending on building and transport remained stable at 17 per
cent
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, million, pounds, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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