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The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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 information about international tourist
arravals
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arrivals
 in millions for five
diffrent
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different
 countries (USA,France,Malaysia,
Brazil
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, and
Egypt
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) from 1995 to 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the largest increase is in
USA
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the USA
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 and France
while
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Brazil
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 and
Egypt
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is
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are
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in
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at
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 the lowest point . Getting back to the details, in 1995,
tourists
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 were a little less than 10
million
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 in
Egypt
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 and
Brazil
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then
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 they
continue
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continued
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 to increase steadily till 2010
Brazil
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 was just above 10
million
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 and
Egypt
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 become just under 20
million
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 meanwhile the figure of
tourists
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 in Malaysia was around 20
million
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 in 1995
,
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 and kept increasing
respectivly
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respectively
 till it reached about 40
million
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 in 2010.
According to
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 the graph
also
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,
USA
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the USA
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 was at the highest point with around 70
million
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tourists
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while
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 the number of
tourists
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 in France was about 30
million
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 in 1995
then
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 it
jupm
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jump
 to 60
million
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 in 2000, After that they both
continue
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continued
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 to go up till they meet in 2010 with around 80
million
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tourists
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words brazil, egypt, tourists, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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