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The line graph below shows the population size, birth and death rate of England and Wales from 1700 to 2000.

The line graph below shows the population size, birth and death rate of England and Wales from 1700 to 2000.
The statistics demonstrate the fluctuations in Wales and England's three distinct types of rates between 1700 and 2000.
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, the chart demonstrates that all categories, with the exception of the
mortality
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rate
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, experienced an upward trend.
In addition
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, the
birth
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rate
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 in both countries had the highest number of individuals at the outset of the period, but it was supplanted by the population size
rate
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 by the end. In terms of change, the
birth
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rate
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 and
mortality
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rate
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 were nearly identical when examined in greater detail. The
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rate
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 and death
rate
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 experienced a significant increase from 30 to 40 and 26 to approximately 38 per 1000 individuals, respectively, between 1700 and 1750.
Subsequently
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, they remained constant for the subsequent 50 years.
As a result
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, both rates experienced a significant decline, with the
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rate
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 reaching its lowest point at 22 and the
mortality
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rate
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 at 20 per 1,000 people in 1950. The
birth
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rate
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 experienced a significant increase of approximately 34% between 1950 and 2000,
while
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 the
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rate
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 remained consistent at 20 per 1,000 individuals. Regarding the remaining statistics, the population size varied between 2 and 10 million from 1700 to 1800.
This
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 figure experienced a substantial increase over the next 200 years, reaching its peak of approximately 50 million at the conclusion of the period.

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