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The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates details about the selling
price
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 of bananas in four countries( USA, Germany,
France
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 and Japan).
Overall
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, as
it
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apply
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shown in the graph
it is clear that
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 Japan had the largest increase over the period of time. Meanwhile,
France
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 had the most dramatic drop.
While
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 Germany and America remained slightly steady.
To begin
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 with. Between 1994 to 1995,
Bananas
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Banana
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 selling
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price
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prices
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 in Japan increased between 2$ to 2.75$ respectively. After
that
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that,
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 the
price
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 of bananas had a dramatic drop from 1996 to 2001. the selling
price
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 rose starting from 2002 to 2004. looking at the three other regions.
France
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, Germany and America. The three
countries
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countries'
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 prices fluctuated over the period of time.
However
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,
France
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 had
an
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a
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 downward trend in 2003 by less than 1$.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words price, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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