The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which girls participate.

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The two pie charts compare the percentage of males and females

participation

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participating

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in different leisure and cultural activities. It is noticeable that the same proportion of men and women enjoyed listening to music,

while

a far higher percentage of

girls

enjoyed reading. The kid’s

favorite

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sports

also

differed widely from one another. First off, just over a third of

boys

play computer games

while

a quarter play basketball.

Additionally

, just over one in

tenth

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a tenth

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of males enjoy skateboarding, and nearly one in five play soccer. The graphic makes it clear that guys enjoy outdoor sports and games the most.

Boys

have extremely bad reading habits, only 2% of them are readers. Interestingly, the number of

boys

and

girls

who enjoy listening to music is equal (10%). Moving on

lady

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girls

are not as likely as males to play computer games. The two most popular activities among

girls

are reading more than a fifth are great readers and dancing 27% pick

this

up. Gymnastics and netball are popular outdoor sports and activities among females , with 11% and 15% respectively. It is interesting to note that the ratio of reading among

girls

is considerably higher than that of

boys

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

199 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

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gender difference
similar participation rates
traditional gender roles
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The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which girls participate.

Nowadays, many people live an unhealthy lifestyle. What are the reasons for this and how do we address this problem?

Restoration of old buildings in main cities involves enormous government expenditure. It would be more beneficial to spend this money to build new houses and roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience.

Many working people get very little or no exercise causing health problems. what are the causes and what is the solution to this problem.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to live in one town or city all your life than to move from one place to another. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Topic: When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree?