Some people think that paying taxes is their only responsibility towards society while others feel that everyone should do more. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Paying
taxes
is
a
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the
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responsibility
for
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of
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each individual in
the
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apply
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society
.
people
are split
i to
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into
half first group
see
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sees
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that paying
taxes
is the only
responsibility
that they should do to the
society
,
while
on the other
hand
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hand,
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some oppose their opinion and believe that
people
need to support the
community
with more stuff. Some
people
see paying their
taxes
is
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as
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the only
responsibility
that they have towards the
community
. They think that by paying their
taxes
they finished their tasks and
responsibility
toward the
society
.
Moreover
, they count the
taxes
as paying
amount
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the amount
an amount
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of money to be out of serving their surrounding
community
.
According to
The New York
Times
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Times,
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those
people
who are paying higher
taxes
are the same
people
who are using the
society
facilities and running them,
specially
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especially
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in New York
due to
the
variblase
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variables
variable
of
taxes
amount in the
last
three years,
also
the financial support of the surrounding states.
On the other hand
, some
people
oppose their opinion and view that individuals need to work more than just paying
taxes
to help
improving
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improve
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the
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apply
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society
for certain factors. They see that
their
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there
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are a lot of reasonable things that they can do to help their
community
like Aid support and
part time
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part-time
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jobs that may lead to a safer and
a
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apply
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happier
society
.
For example
,
at
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in
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1991 a study happened in Richmond VA that showed
while
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that
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getting
people
busy and having them help each
others
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other
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in their free time
reduce
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reduced
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more than 37 percent of
violent
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violence
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. In conclusion, my perspective is helping
developing
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develop
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the
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apply
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society
and try to work more is much better and safer for individuals and families.
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Enhance the introduction by clearly outlining both perspectives and stating your own opinion to frame the discussion better.
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The essay successfully addresses both viewpoints and provides a personal opinion on the topic.
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