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Writing Samples
Band 4

discuss whether the adantage of nuclear energy outweigh the potential risks and environmental concerns

#adantage #energy #risks #concerns
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In
the
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contemporary society, the
energy
 which is made by nuclear material is a recurring argument.
this
 writer believes that the drawbacks of money consuming and increasing pollution
bynuclear
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by nuclear
nuclear
 waste outweigh the advantages of decreasing carbon
doxide
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dioxide
 emission. The most advantageous factor of nuclear power is
thar
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that
 it needs
the
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big
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 amount of money to construct.
In other words
,if it was not checked or rebuilt
anually
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annually
, the safe would not
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albe
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able
 to ensure that the toxic chemicals
has
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 released or not.
As a result
, money that
need
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 to
spend
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 on that
energy
 could make some nations, especially the poor
one
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,become budget deficit. The pollution which is caused by nuclear
energy
 is the point that
worth
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 considering. It must be recognised that the reaction to produce
energy
 by nuclear
need
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needs
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 to have toxic chemical elements. After a period of
using
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, these chemicals need to be thrown away because of
the
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 inability to
br
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be
 reused.
Thus
,
this
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these
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pollutans
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pollutants
pollutant
 lead to
radiovative
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radioactive
radiative
 pollution, which can cause disorder or make the
surrounding
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surroundings
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 become unhabitable if
thay
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they
could not
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 be treated in the right way.
For instance
, now there are 30 nations using
energy
 in total, but
just
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japan
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 invested in storage in order to keep these
element
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elements
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 in one special area forever and avoid spreading out.
However
, some people believe that using chemical elements to produce
energy
 so that fuel and coal will be no longer needed. Simply put, nuclear
energy
 does not emit gasses that harm
to
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the environment and individuals
such
 as
cardondioxide
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carbon dioxide
, which is the factor of some serious
illness
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.
This
maybe
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may be
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 true,
nevertheless
, the
radiovation
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radiation
 of toxic chemicals can cause
handicapor
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handicap or
handicap
 even cancer.
Consequently
, nuclear power is not really eco-friendly.
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logical structure
Your essay demonstrates an understanding of the topic, but it requires clearer organization. Consider improving your essay's logical structure by ensuring that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea. This will make it easier for the reader to follow your argument.
introduction conclusion present
You have an introduction and a conclusion, which is good. However, make sure that your conclusion provides a strong summary of your main points to leave the reader with a clear understanding of your argument.
supported main points
Enhance your use of specific examples and evidence in each paragraph to more strongly support your main points. This will help to clearly and comprehensively develop your ideas.
complete response
To address the task more completely, ensure that you provide a balanced discussion of both the advantages and disadvantages of nuclear energy. Currently, your essay focuses more on the disadvantages. A more balanced view will enhance your task response.
clear comprehensive ideas
Work on expressing your ideas more clearly by focusing on grammar and vocabulary. This will improve your overall coherence and cohesion, making it easier for the reader to understand your arguments.
relevant specific examples
Your essay presents relevant and specific concerns related to the topic, such as the environmental impact and financial costs of nuclear energy. This demonstrates an understanding of the potential risks associated with nuclear power.
introduction conclusion present
You have a clear introduction that outlines the main argument of your essay, and your conclusion reiterates your main points, providing a sense of closure. This structure helps guide the reader through your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • greenhouse gases
  • global warming
  • climate change
  • initial costs
  • complex technology
  • catastrophic accidents
  • Chernobyl
  • Fukushima
  • hazardous
  • storage challenges
  • national energy security
  • foreign energy imports
  • thorium reactors
  • fusion energy
  • economic development
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