The chart belows gives information on the number of workers in different occupations who migrated to Australia between 2009 and 2012.
The bar chart illustrates data about the number of migration employees to Australia in different 4 careers from 2009 to 2012.
Overall
, it can be seeen
that the number of accountants was the highest trend Correct your spelling
seen
while
the figure for computer programmer
was the lowest. Fix the agreement mistake
programmers
In addition
, cook and software engineer were a slight decrease.
Looking at the figures in further
detail, the number of accountant
started at 20 Change to a plural noun
accountants
thousand
and then
reach
a peak of 28 Wrong verb form
reached
thousand
before ending the period at 21 thousand
in 2012. By contrast
, the figure fo
computer programmer at the same trend around 2 Correct your spelling
for
thousand
between 2009 and 2011 after which it experienced a rise to 5 thousad
in 2012.
Turning to the remaining statistics, the data for cook fluctuated from 15 to 18 Correct your spelling
thousand
thousand
. Additionally
, software
Add an article
a software
engineer
Wrong verb form
engineering
was
a slight rise Verb problem
saw
that
starting at 19 Correct word choice
apply
thousand
bt
Correct your spelling
but
then
it witnessed a decrease to 17 thousand
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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