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The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph provides the trend of
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British's
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travelers
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 and
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UK
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 visitors from 1979 to 1999
while
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 the bar chart
inform
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shows
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 the
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amount
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number
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 of tourists who visited
top
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the top
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 5 countries by
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residents
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.
Overall
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, what stands
ouy
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out
 from the graph is both
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UK
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travelers
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 and visitors
were
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increased over two decades and France was the
favorite
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favourite
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 region dropped in by
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peoples
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people
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. Another interesting point is
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 the number of
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residents
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 who liked to travel was higher than The
UK
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visitor
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visitors
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itselfs
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itself
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, in 1979 the percentage of both
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peoples
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people
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 who visited
to
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and from The
UK
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 started almost
in
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the same
amount
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 which was
in
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10
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millions
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million
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 and slightly more than 10
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millions
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million
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populances
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populaces
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, despite both of the
sector
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rose
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 steadily, the
amount
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 of
British
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peoples
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people
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 who went abroad had
more
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a higher
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 percentage from around 20
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millions
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million
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 in 1984, and keep
climb
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 dramatically
untill
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until
 peaked in 1999 which had just over 50
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millions
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million
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British
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residents
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.
However
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, the
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amount
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number
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 of tourists who visited The
UK
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 from 1984
moderatelly
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moderately
 increased
about
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by
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 more than 10
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millions
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million people
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peoples
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 to
reached
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 a high of almost 30
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millions
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million
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populates
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in 1999.
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, European
country
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countries
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 became the top destination
by
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for
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the
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British
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Residents
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 in 1999, with France
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about over 10
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millions
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million people
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peoples
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, and Spain
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slightly less than 10
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millions
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million people
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peoples
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.
Meanwhile
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 Turkey only had a minority
visitors
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of visitors
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 from The
UK
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was only
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,
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 less than 5
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millions
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million people
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peoples
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Vocabulary: Replace the words british, uk, amount, residents, peoples, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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