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The chart illustrates the total minutes that the British use telephone call between 1995 to 2002 in three types including Local - fixed line, national and international - fixed line, and mobiles.

The chart illustrates the total minutes that the British use telephone call between 1995 to 2002 in three types including Local - fixed line, national and international - fixed line, and mobiles.
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The line graph displays information about the
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bilions
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billions
 of
minutes
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 used by the UK telephone calls in three different categories from 1995 to 2002.
Overall
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, The largest amount of
minutes
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 was used by the local-
fixed
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-fixed
 lines.
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, the least was used by the mobiles throughout the entire period of time.
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 with, as the chart
represnts
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represents
 from 1995 the local- fixed lines started with
highest
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the highest
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used
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 of
minutes
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 by
roghly
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roughly
 70
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bilions
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billion
 of
minutes
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.
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 to that, it continued increasing till the year of 1999 with the use of 90
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.
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 it started to decrease reaching
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the same level of usage in 2002. For national and international we can clearly see that it was used a bit less than the first category. It rose
thorughout
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throughout
 the years starting from 1995 to 2002 by 60 to 65
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bilions
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billions
billion
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minutes
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 respectively. The mobiles
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on
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 the other hand, it was the lowest in 1995 as it
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 it wasn't used at all.
moreover
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, it started a dramatic jump from the year
of
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1995 to 2002 with the use of 35
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bilions
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billions
billion
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minutes
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 roughly.
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