The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates
honey
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the honey
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bee
's lifecycle from
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the eggs
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eggs
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egg
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stage to
grown
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the grown
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female
bee
.
Overall
, it
shown
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shows
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that
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apply
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that the
bee
go
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goes
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through 5 main
phase
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phases
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to become
a
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an
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adult female, which takes 34 -36
days
.
To begin
with,
the
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apply
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bee
life
start
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starts
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when a queen
bee
lays one or two eggs
evey
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every
three
days
,
then
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and then
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its
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it
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start
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starts
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to hatch after 9-10
days
, within five
days
a baby
bee
getout
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gets
from the egg and grows slightly bigger in the 7th day.
Moreover
, the nymph
start
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starts
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a stage where it moults three times
while
growing in 9
days
, after that
its
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it
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grow
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grows
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to become a young adult and
its
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it
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only takes
a
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apply
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4
days
to turn into a mature female
bee
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bee, days with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life cycle
  • laying of eggs
  • queen bee
  • hatch into larvae
  • rapid growth
  • develop into pupae
  • significant transformation
  • emergence of the adult bee
  • matures fully
  • cyclical nature
  • colony’s survival
  • reproduction process
  • subsequent generations
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