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Band 3

The pictures below show how tomato ketchup is made

#pictures #show #tomato #ketchup
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The diagram shows the procedure
of
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 making tomato
ketchup
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Overall
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, the process of
the
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preparing
ketchup
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 begins from picking
tomatoes
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till
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the
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seeing the manufactured product in the fridge contains fifteen stages. The procedure starts when
tomatoes
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 are ripe. It has to
accept
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 as a signal of the picking time of the
tomatoes
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 and putting them into
basket
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the basket
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. Once collected products are sorted good and bad
tomatoes
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, the boxes are
then
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 sent to the
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ketchup making
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ketchup-making
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 factory. After removing from skin, stalk and seeds, the
tomatoes
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 are put
in to
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 the containers for crushing. Having been added sugar, vinegar and salt
for making
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to make
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unforgettable
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an unforgettable
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 taste.
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 the process of boiling which makes
procedure
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 closer to the end. It takes approximately two hours to leave the boiled product for cooling. After pouring tomato
ketchup
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 into the bottles, the
button
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buttons
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 of the labelling and quality control process are knocked.
After
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this
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, well-designed bottles are added to the boxes carefully.
Finally
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, the boxes with filled
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bottles of
the
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tomato
ketchup
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 are delivered by the driver to
supermarket
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the supermarket
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 for consumers who are really keen on eating their
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 and fries with
ketchup
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grammatical accuracy
Ensure consistency in using articles and prepositions in order to maintain grammatical accuracy. This will boost clarity in your essay.
structure
Consider adding a brief overview sentence at the beginning of the essay to better frame the process before detailing the individual steps.
development
Include specific examples or details that demonstrate your understanding of the process to strengthen your argument.
content
The essay provides a comprehensive step-by-step overview of the tomato ketchup production process.
structure
There is a logical progression of ideas from the start to the end of the process, making it easy to follow.
vocabulary
The vocabulary used is appropriate and specific to the topic, showing a good command of language related to food production.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production process
  • raw material
  • final product
  • selection
  • preparation
  • washing
  • sorting
  • peeling
  • deseeding
  • quality control
  • cooking
  • concentration
  • thickening
  • seasoning
  • additional ingredients
  • spices
  • sugar
  • vinegar
  • flavor concentration
  • bottling
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • safety standards
  • taste test
  • labeling
  • integrity checks
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