The illustrations show how chocolate is produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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how chocolate is manufactured. As is shown by the illustrations, there are ten stages in the process, beginning with the growing of the pods on the cacao tree and ending

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with the production of the chocolate. First of all,

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cacao comes from the cacao tree, which is grown in

Sout

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America, Africa and Indonesia.

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, when the pods are ripe and red, they are harvested and after that white cocoa

beans

removed

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. Following the processing of

fermantation

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fermentation

beans

are spread on a table for drying under the sun. In the next stage, dried

beans

are put in large sacks and transported for

delivering

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to the factory by train or lorry. They are

then

roasted

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high

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temperature , at 350C. After these processes, roasted

beans

are crushed and

seperated

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separated

from

outer

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the outer

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shell. In the final stage,

inner

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the inner

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part is pressed and chocolate is manufactured.

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grammar

Consider revising grammatical errors and awkward phrasing like 'As is shown by the illustrations' - try 'As shown by the illustrations' for better clarity. Fix minor issues with punctuation such as 'harvested and after that white cocoa beans removed' - it should be 'and after that, white cocoa beans are removed'.

task response

Your essay does a good job describing the stages and including specific details. Perhaps you could add more information about the intermediate stages to ensure a clearer response.

coverage

You effectively summarized the process from start to finish, covering all key stages.

vocabulary

Your explanation is clear, and you used appropriate vocabulary related to the process of making chocolate.

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Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

150 words

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Fully explain your ideas

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