You are living in a city in a foreign country, and a friend from your home country is soon coming to visit you for several days. Write an email to your friend, •asking him or her to bring some things from home which you need •saying why you need them •making arrangements to meet

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Dear John How are you? It’s been a
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, hasn’t it? The
last
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time must have been Sarah’s wedding. Anyway, I’m getting in touch because I’ve heard you are coming to Montreal in 10 days and you plan to stay for some days which is great! I’d be really grateful if you could bring a few things for me. My mother will bring them to you if you don’t mind.
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on my
last
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trip to Iran, I left my smartwatch at my sister’s house
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I really need it because I’m not allowed to use my phone at work but I can wear my smartwatch to notify if someone has an emergency task, and to be honest I can’t afford to buy a new one.
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I need my blue skirt which I bought in Italy
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year and I am planning to wear
to
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my
boyfriend
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boyfriend's
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birthday party because I recently bought a beautiful shirt which goes with my blue skirt. I hope these are manageable for you, as they don’t take up much space in your suitcase. As you’ll be arriving on Sunday, I will pick you up from the airport and we could have lunch together. I can’t wait to see you
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, All the best, Negar
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task achievement
Your email successfully addresses all the task requirements: requesting items, explaining why you need them, and making arrangements to meet. However, it could be strengthened by providing a bit more detail about how these items would help you.
coherence cohesion
While your email is coherent and logically structured, with a clear introduction and conclusion, consider using more cohesive devices (like consequently, moreover, etc.) to enhance the flow between your ideas.
task achievement
Make sure to maintain the friendly, conversational tone throughout the email, as you have done well. Also, try to add a few more sentences to make your specific needs and reasons even clearer.
coherence cohesion
You have a well-organized email with a clear greeting, body, and closing. This makes it easy for the reader to follow.
task achievement
Specific examples, like the smartwatch and blue skirt, make your email personal and relatable.
coherence cohesion
Your friendly tone and expression of excitement at seeing your friend are very engaging and appropriate.

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