The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie charts illustrate
proportion
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the proportion
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of Yemen and Italy residents in three different
ages
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groups.
Overall
, Yemen had
significantly
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a significantly
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young
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younger
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population
in 2000, and
also
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apply
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it had
also
same trend for the year 2050. Despite
this
, for both countries, their populations will get older over the given time period. In the year 2000, just over
a
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apply
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half
the
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of the
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Yemeni
population
were under 14, opposite with Italians, under a fifth for
same
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the same
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age
group
.
Percentage
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The percentage
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of Yemeni people
which
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who
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were over 60 years,
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old had
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had
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a small minority, at 3.6%.
In contrast
,
proportion
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the proportion
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of
Italian
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the Italian
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population
were
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was
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approximately a quarter.
Furthermore
, the largest
group
for Italy was the 15-59 years olds with just over 60%
while
Yemen had 46.3% of its
population
in
this
category. Over the
five
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next five
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decades,
percentage
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the percentage
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of
Yemen’s
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Yemenis
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will increase
just
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by just
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over %2 and the middle
group
will rise
11
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by 11
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%
while
the youngest
group
will decrease
nearly
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by nearly
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13%. In 2050, the number of people in Italy, over 60 years
olds
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old
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, will reach
to
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apply
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42.3% and the percentage of the youngest and middle
category
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categories
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share
same
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the same
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trend, they will decrease,
at
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to
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11.5% and 46.2% respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 3 times.
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