The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie charts illustrate
proportion
of Yemen and Italy residents in three different Add an article
the proportion
ages
groups.
Change the noun form
age
Overall
, Yemen had significantly
Add an article
a significantly
young
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younger
population
in 2000, and also
it had Rephrase
apply
also
same trend for the year 2050. Despite this
, for both countries, their populations will get older over the given time period.
In the year 2000, just over a
half Correct article usage
apply
the
Yemeni Change preposition
of the
population
were under 14, opposite with Italians, under a fifth for same
age Add an article
the same
group
. Percentage
of Yemeni people Correct article usage
The percentage
which
were over 60 years, Correct pronoun usage
who
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old had
had
a small minority, at 3.6%. Verb problem
was
In contrast
, proportion
of Add an article
the proportion
Italian
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the Italian
population
were
approximately a quarter. Change the verb form
was
Furthermore
, the largest group
for Italy was the 15-59 years olds with just over 60% while
Yemen had 46.3% of its population
in this
category.
Over the five
decades, Correct word choice
next five
percentage
of Correct article usage
the percentage
Yemen’s
will increase Change noun form
Yemenis
just
over %2 and the middle Change preposition
by just
group
will rise 11
% Change preposition
by 11
while
the youngest group
will decrease nearly
13%. In 2050, the number of people in Italy, over 60 years Change preposition
by nearly
olds
, will reach Correct your spelling
old
to
42.3% and the percentage of the youngest and middle Change preposition
apply
category
share Fix the agreement mistake
categories
same
trend, they will decrease, Correct article usage
the same
at
11.5% and 46.2% respectively.Change preposition
to
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