Over the last few decades, the media has promoted the image of young thin women as being ideal. What problems has this caused? What solutions can you suggest for this issue?
Most influencers consider a petite body as a woman's fitness target, prompting teenagers to become as thin as possible.
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misinformation leads to promoting youth audiences becoming as thin as possible. Those actions could potentially harm their fitness. The solution to that problem is to use celebrities to influence their followers to have a more healthy way of life.
Youngster in Linking Words
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modern era considers a petite type as their main goal. Those considerations were Linking Words
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, it will become an obsession for the younger one. Most of them are cutting their daily intakes, hoping to gain their idol's shape. Linking Words
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, cutting too many calories consumed below normal people's standard is a sign of anorexia. Some people argue the issue is caused by that, but studies show that being thin is prompting that. Linking Words
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that evidence and the studies that are being conducted, experts agree that being thin is a sickness and could potentially endanger humans.
Experts already show in their studies that being thin is unhealthy. Even so, most teenage women did not hear that. One of the best solutions is to use the influencer's power to promote more healthy habits. Doctors should utilize public figures to show a good daily diet to them. They Linking Words
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should encourage the youth to do exercises daily. To support those, idols should Linking Words
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‘show’ the effect of doing healthy daily like their body shape, motivating their follower to do the same. The perfect example of Linking Words
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a Gen-Z figure, Anya Geraldine, whose most of her followers agree that she is a perfect figure. Linking Words
As a result
, most of her followers are following her gym habits, making them to be more healthy.
In general, the image of being petite as a body goal will only cause an unhealthy condition and lead to sickness. The solution to correct Linking Words
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using celebrities to encourage the younger generation to develop healthy habits.Linking Words
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