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The chart illustrates the total minutes that the British use telephone call between 1995 to 2002 in three types including Local - fixed line, national and international - fixed line, and mobiles.

The chart illustrates the total minutes that the British use telephone call between 1995 to 2002 in three types including Local - fixed line, national and international - fixed line, and mobiles.
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The bar graph depicts the number of
minutes
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 a type of British telephone call was used in a 7-year
period
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 between 1995 to 2002.
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, three different types of growth trends can be observed in all three types of telephone calls. Where the local were used the most
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 National & international
then
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 mobile telephone calls.
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 with,
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, The local fixed line was observed to a steady incline reaching a plateau of 90
billion
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 from over 70
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minutes
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 in the first 4 years in 1995 to 1998, which later took a steady dip and reached back
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70
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minutes
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 in 2002.
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, national & international fixed line calls grew steadily throughout the seven-year
period
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 reaching 60
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 starting from marginally close to 40
billion
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minutes
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.
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, mobile calls rose gradually till 1998 from less
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then
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 5
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 to close to 10
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 after which exponential growth was observed in the later 4 years which reached over 40
billion
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minutes
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. In conclusion, national & international and mobiles grew steadily and exponentially respectively.
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, local calls maintained 70
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minutes
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 in the 7-year
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 after up & down within
this
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period
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, period, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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