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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at early stage. Punishment is necessary to help them learn the difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? what sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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Parenting of young ones plays a crucial role in society.
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their future. Punishment is often used to learn what is right and what is wrong. I partly agree with the statement because there are other methods to educate an intelligent person. In
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 I will discuss reasons
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 of using a penalty. On the one hand, punishment is necessary to help them learn the difference. The children
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 know
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life's difficulties.
For instance
, Russian is used to strict rules at school and in
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 the punctual people nowadays.
On the other hand
, the excessive penalty can lead to
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 sphere.
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 result, children with low self-esteem
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.
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people who
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 strictly cannot express their
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accept
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 injustice. There are other ways of parenting
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 as motivation, encouragement, the good deeds being an example for them.
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Japan use
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relaxing methods for teaching
youngers
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. They teach them
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to keep order and
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a polite
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 attitude. Babies copy the
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 of their parents and teachers. So first of all, all teachers should change their bad
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 to a good one.
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The essay addresses the topic but could delve deeper into both sides of the argument. Including more nuanced points would strengthen the discussion.
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The introduction clearly states your position on the topic.
coherence cohesion
The essay attempts to present both sides of the argument, which shows balance.
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Use of examples to justify points is noted, which strengthens the arguments presented.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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