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Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience

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Some people believe that tourists can
provide
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have
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bad
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a bad
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 impact
to
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on
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 the
country
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 they
visited
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visit
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I'm totally disagree
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 in my opinion I think it's useful and
improve
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improves
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 the
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country
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 economy and culture.
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tourism's
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tourism
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 can develop the Nation in many ways
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such
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help's
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helps
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 people to accept others and
enhanced
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enhancing
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diversity
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the diversity
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 of
public
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the public
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.
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, it can establish new economic opportunities,
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 as hotels, restaurants, shopping
center
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and
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etc . When I traveled to India for two weeks I realized the amount of money that I spent there. I believe it had a lot of advantages of tourism's for the community and the
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Furthermore
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 in my view having
occasional
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event
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events
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for encouraging
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to encourage
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 tourist
attraction
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attraction,
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it
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will
facilitie
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facilitate
 and probably give more information about the
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country
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country's
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 heritage and cultural norms.
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task response
Focus on fully developing your main idea. Each supporting point should be elaborated on with specific details or examples.
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Avoid contractions (e.g., "it's") in formal writing. Use full forms like "it is".
coherence cohesion
Ensure the essay has a clear conclusion to summarize your stance and main points.
coherence cohesion
Improve transitions between ideas to make your argument flow better. Use phrases like "Furthermore," "In addition," and "On the other hand,".
coherence cohesion
Check for grammatical errors and ensure correct subject-verb agreement, e.g., "tourism can develop" not "tourism's can develop".
task response
You present a clear stance on the topic by stating your disagreement with the idea that tourism has many negative effects.
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Your essay provides relevant examples from your personal experience, which strengthens your argument.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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