The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram below provides a vivid representation of the processes involved in the production of instant
noodles
. There are a total of 8 stages provided which will be discussed below.
First of all, the company stores the flour used for manufacturing in storage silosUse synonyms
,
and Remove the comma
apply
then
transported Linking Words
to
Correct pronoun usage
it to
site
using trucks. Upon arrival, they are transferred to a machine called a mixerCorrect article usage
the site
,
and Remove the comma
apply
then
combined with water and oil to be thoroughly mixed into Linking Words
dough
. Afterwards, the Use synonyms
dough
is transported on rollers in the form of thin sheets to be cut into Use synonyms
dough
strips in the next stage.
Use synonyms
Furthermore
, the Linking Words
dough
strips are Use synonyms
then
shaped into Linking Words
Use synonyms
noodles
discs before entering a section of the machine containing boiling oil.The Fix the agreement mistake
noodle
Use synonyms
noodles
discs are Fix the agreement mistake
noodle
deep fried
and dried at Add a hyphen
deep-fried
this
stage. Linking Words
In addition
, the fried and dried Linking Words
noodles
are poured into noodle cupsUse synonyms
,
and Remove the comma
apply
then
mixed with vegetables and spices.
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Finally
, the noodle cups move to the next stage where they are sealed and labelledLinking Words
,
before eventually Remove the comma
apply
taken
to be packaged in boxes for distribution.Add a missing verb
being taken
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