The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram below provides a vivid representation of the processes involved in the production of instant
noodles
. There are a total of 8 stages provided which will be discussed below. First of all, the company stores the flour used for manufacturing in storage silos
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and
then
transported
to
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site
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using trucks. Upon arrival, they are transferred to a machine called a mixer
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and
then
combined with water and oil to be thoroughly mixed into
dough
. Afterwards, the
dough
is transported on rollers in the form of thin sheets to be cut into
dough
strips in the next stage.
Furthermore
, the
dough
strips are
then
shaped into
noodles
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discs before entering a section of the machine containing boiling oil.The
noodles
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discs are
deep fried
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and dried at
this
stage.
In addition
, the fried and dried
noodles
are poured into noodle cups
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and
then
mixed with vegetables and spices.
Finally
, the noodle cups move to the next stage where they are sealed and labelled
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before eventually
taken
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to be packaged in boxes for distribution.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words noodles, dough with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manufacturing process
  • Noodle dough
  • Steaming
  • Cutting
  • Dough sheeting
  • Molding
  • Air-drying
  • Frying
  • Seasoning
  • Quality control
  • Packaging
  • Shelf life
  • Flavoring agents
  • Texture
  • Instant meal
  • Convenience food
  • Production line
  • Consumer
  • Ingredient mixing
  • Safety standards
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