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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates
on
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the changes
of
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in
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 British people
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who exchanged
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exchanged
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exchanging
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 money
to
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for
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beneficents
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benefits
 by
age
 range over a period of twenty
years
 from 1990 to 2010.
Overall
, the total spending of
years
 old
middle-
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middle-aged
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age
 accounted for the highest
percent
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percentage
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 from 36-50
years
and
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accounting for 42% in 1990 and 35% in 2010, the data was higher than the
year
 old from 18-25 to 20%.
General
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In general
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, each
age
 group made up 18-25
years
 old, accounting for 5-17% from 1990 to 2010,
smallest
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the smallest
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 in the
age
 ranges on the chart. In all the
chart
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charts
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 in 1990, the total spending of
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the year
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year old
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year-old
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fluduated
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fluctuated
 again.
Year
 old from 26-35 was highest, at 30% per
year
, 22% higher than 1990.
Age
-old grand for 40%, the total
year
 old 51-65 of
age
-old in 1990 to 35% and 2010 to 39%. People in their 40s, in 1990
they
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spent number money
humanity
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on humanity
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 because they
know
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knew
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this
is
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was
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 necessary for the future. People aged
higher
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apply
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65 or older
compare
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compared
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 to
year
 old 51-65 spend money on charities
reduce
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reduced
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5
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by 5
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% in 1990 and
reduce
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reduced
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10
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by 10
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% in 2010. The
years
 old from 1990 and 2010
to increase
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increased
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 in each
age
 group 36-
50
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50-year-old
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year
 old tended old
age
 and charities more than other ages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charitable donations
  • age range/bracket/group
  • percentage (%)
  • 20-year period
  • British people
  • trends
  • increase/decrease
  • significant change
  • donation patterns
  • remained stable
  • highest/lowest
  • observe
  • compare
  • summarize
  • comment on
  • relevant features
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