Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Digital technologies (for example, computers and smartphones) have improved the quality of communication between people. Use reasons and examples to explain your answer.

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a large
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I agree that digital
technologies
have improved the quality of
communication
between
people
. The advanced
of
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technologies
support
a
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fast
contact
between
people
which
enhanced
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sufficient and convenient
communication
. The
The digital
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technologies
provides
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a
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fast
contact
between
people
with no limitation of time and district which
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sufficient and convenient
communication
. Digital
technologies
or devices are tools that
facilitates
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people
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people's
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communication
. The characteristic of using digital
technologies
is
people
can
contact
others anytime
in
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anywhere. Digital devices
such
as computers and smartphones are
easily
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to carry. Nowadays, almost everyone
own
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a cellphone,
people
can send messages, have a call or FaceTime to others even though they are not together in the
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.
Communication
became
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faster and easier by using digital devices.
For example
,
people
can
contact
each other from different countries,
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introduction conclusion
The essay introduces the main idea, but it could benefit from a clearer and more structured introduction, as well as a concluding paragraph to summarize the main points discussed.
logical structure
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and that supporting points are well-organized. This will help make your argument more cohesive and logical.
relevant specific examples
While the essay includes some relevant examples, providing more specific and detailed examples would strengthen the argument. Try to illustrate your points with real-life scenarios or statistics where applicable.
complete response
The essay makes a clear attempt to address the task, discussing how digital technologies have improved communication.
clear comprehensive ideas
You have addressed the prompt and provided your viewpoint on the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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