The line graph shows the income of four cafes in New York last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the income of four cafes in New York last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares the
income
of four coffee shops in New York over the
period
of the previous year. All figures are shown in US dollars. It can be seen from the chart that the
overall
trend was upward, as the incomes for three of the four cafes increased during the
period
.
In particular
, there were dramatic rises for the ‘Wi-Fi Cafe’ (moving it 3rd to 1st place) and ‘Cafe Cool’,
while
‘Internet Express’ demonstrated comparatively steady growth.
In contrast
, the
income
for ‘The Tea Room’ plummeted, going from the highest to the lowest
income
during the year. The Tea Room began the
period
with the highest
income
figure of $160,000 USD
inJanuary
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in January
. It experienced a clear steady decline despite some fluctuations, reaching $140,000 in October before dropping sharply to finish the
period
with the lowest figure of $50,000 in December.
In contrast
, the Wi-Fi Cafe started in
3nd
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place with sales of only $50,000
,
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but rose steadily hitting $100,000 in July. Its
income
then
dipped during
Augustand
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August and
September before figures soared, finishing up in December with the highest
income
overall
of $190,000. Moving on to Internet Express, there was a steady fall in the cafe’s
income
in the first four months of the year, starting in January
with
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$95,000 and flattening out at around $80,000. It
then
saw a recovery from August, to end the
period
at $135,000.
Similarly
,
the
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Cafe Cool fluctuated between $20,000 and $40,000 in the first six months before increasing more steadily to $60,000 in November, after which it witnessed a sudden upturn to finish at $120,000 dollars in December.
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