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The line graph shows the number of players in four different sports in a particular European country between 1985 and 2005.

The line graph shows the number of players in four different sports in a particular European country between 1985 and 2005.
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The line graph illustrates the changes in the number of participants engaging in four different sports, namely badminton, tennis, basketball, and rugby, in a specific European country from 1985 to 2005.
Overall
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, basketball maintained a relatively stable trend throughout the period,
whereas
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 tennis witnessed a significant decrease in popularity. Badminton experienced minor fluctuations,
while
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 rugby demonstrated the most drastic fluctuations in terms of participant numbers over the two-decade span. Basketball garnered consistent interest over the 20-year span, starting at approximately 75
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 in 1985, reaching a peak of 100 in 1995, and concluding at 75 participants in 2005.
Conversely
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, tennis experienced a notable decline, with a starting point of nearly 300
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 in 1985, a decrease to 175 in 1995, and a sharp drop to 50
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 by 2005.
On the other hand
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, badminton maintained relative stability in participation levels, commencing just below 50
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 in 1985, slightly increasing to around 60
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 in 1995, and ending slightly above 50
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 in 2005.
In contrast
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, rugby witnessed the most significant fluctuations, starting at slightly over 50
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 in 1985, surging to nearly 275 participants in 1995, before experiencing a notable decline to around 200
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 by 2005.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words players with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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