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Expenditure on Fast Foods (in Million Pounds) by Income Groups, UK 1990

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The bar chart illustrates spending on three types of fast food, which was divided by three levels of income in the UK in 1990. From an
overall
 perspective, it is evident that the high-income
group
 spent on fast food the most,
whereas
 a reverse pattern could be observed in the figures for the average and low-income groups over the years shown. Regarding the high-income
group
, the budget for hamburgers was the highest, at approximately $43. The data on pizza was far smaller, at about $19. Fish and chips,
however
, accounted for the lowest value, at only $17. As for the average-income
group
, residents paid $25 for fish and chips, double the figures for pizza,
whereas
 above $30 was spent on hamburgers. Taking a look at the low-income
group
, about $17 was expended on fish and chips,
while
 only $13 and $7 were spent on hamburgers and pizza, respectively.
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task achievement
Make sure to use consistent currency formats (e.g., 'dollars' or 'pounds') and maintain accuracy when describing data from the chart.
coherence and cohesion
Include a clear conclusion to summarize the main points discussed in the essay.
task achievement
The essay gives a detailed account of spending on three types of fast food by different income groups, making effective use of the provided data.
coherence and cohesion
The logical structure of the essay is clear, with an introduction, main body paragraphs, and a coherent flow of ideas.

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