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The first graph shows the number of train passengers from 2000 to 2009; the second compares the percentage of trains running on time and target in the period.

The first graph shows the number of train passengers from 2000 to 2009; the second compares the percentage of trains running on time and target in the period.
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the given line chart illustrates the number and percentage of
trains
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 that arrived on time and the number of passengers who used
trains
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 between 2000 and 2009. The general overview here is that, over the period, the proportion of passengers fluctuated
while
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 the percentage of
trains
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 running on time on the standard line remained constant.
According to
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 the data, From 2000 to 2009, it was important to first note that the number of passengers using
trains
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 increased significantly from 36 to 46,
although
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, there was fluctuation, starting at 46 and ending at 42 million.
Furthermore
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, the ratios of standard line and target were constant from 2000 to 2009.
instead
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, from 2000 to 2007, the rate of
trains
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 running on time increased by 92
per
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per cent
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 cent and there was a peak of 96 per cent,
in contrast
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, there was a drop dramatically at 92 per cent,
moreover
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, there were boosters again from 92 to 97.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words trains with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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