The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph demonstrates the change in ownership of three different electrical appliances and the number of
hours
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spent doing housework per week in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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usage of electrical appliances shows an upward trend from 1920 and 2019.
Also
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, the number of spending
with
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on
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household chores
was
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apply
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recorded a downward trend during
this
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same period.
According to
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the data about the percentage of households,
the
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a
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notable change was recorded in refrigerators between 1920 and 1960.
This
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appliance percentage rose dramatically from 2% in 1920 to 90% in 1960,
became
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becoming
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from the
last
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popular appliance to the most popular one.
On the other hand
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, vacuum cleaners’ usage
also
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has increased.
Lastly
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, two of these appliances were recorded
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both
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apply
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at 100% in 2019. Looking at the second graph in detail, one can see that the number of
hours
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was
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apply
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decreased from 50
hours
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per week in 1920 to 20
hours
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per week in 1960. The figures were fluctuated throughout the second half of the period.
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, it went to roughly 10
hours
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in 2019.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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